Play 4: The 2nd Coming
CHARACTERS
ALEX, male, 18
RACHEL, female, 17
(he stands slightly to the side of center stage, a spotlight is on him and otherwise the stage is dark. From the bit of the stage visible, it appears to be a sidewalk in an empty city block.)
(she enters from his side of the stage, a spotlight follows her as well.)
ALEX
Rachel, you’re not going to believe this!
RACHEL
What is it?
ALEX
I (Beat.) I found Jesus.
RACHEL
What are you talking about, aren’t you Jewish?
ALEX
(angrily)
What the hell does that have to do with this?
RACHEL
(confused)
What do you mean? It has everything to do with it, it’s not often you hear a jew say they’ve found Jesus.
ALEX
No no no, you don’t understand. I literally fucking found Jesus!
RACHEL
What are you talking about?
(Alex points to the center of the stage. Lights up on the entire stage, there is a long brown haired man in a white robe lying on his stomach in the center of the stage.)
(she walks over to the man and looks down at him. He follows behind her.)
(Pause.)
RACHEL
Holy shit.
ALEX
Yeah.
RACHEL
How do you know that’s actually Jesus, I mean there’s plenty of people who might just be dressed up as him or something?
ALEX
Well it’s not fucking Halloween.
RACHEL
Still.
ALEX
Well, maybe it’s just me, but maybe the fact that he had a fucking glowing halo of light around his head.
RACHEL
But there is no halo.
ALEX
I did say “had”
RACHEL
What do you mean?
ALEX
Well, there was a halo, before….
RACHEL
Wait (Beat.) Alex, why is he lying unmoving on the ground.
(Pause.)
ALEX
Well, uh, he kinda snuck up on me.
RACHEL
What the hell do you mean?
ALEX
Well, it’s late, this isn’t the greatest neighborhood, and, and I heard what sounded like someone sneaking up on me.
RACHEL
You’re…you’re not saying you…
(she bends down to examine the man. After a few seconds she rolls him over. There is a knife in his stomach and his robe is red all around it.)
RACHEL
Alex (Beat.) You, you fucking stabbed Jesus!
ALEX
I didn’t know it was him when I stabbed him!
RACHEL
Who cares? You fucking stabbed Jesus!
ALEX
You think I don’t know that? What am I gonna do?
RACHEL
How the hell should I know?!
ALEX
I don’t know about you, but I’m getting the fuck out of here!
(He starts to run offstage, then quickly runs back, jerks the knife out of the Jesus, and then runs offstage with it in his hand.)
(she stands still frozen in shock for a few moments.)
RACHEL
What a fucking day.
(she turns and runs offstage in the opposite direction than the one he had gone.)
(Blackout.)
posted by Ben Rosbrow @ 2:04 PM
4 comments
4 Comments:
The good thing about insomnia is...
I get to read your stuff.
So- todays masterpiece...tee hee:
*gets into Zay Core class critiquing mode*
I really liked how you based this off your comic and I thought it was an awesome scene- how it kept building up (not knowing jesus had been stabbed in the beginning- but having some hint with him lying down- very nice) and the whole randomness of the scene. Fucking Wonderful. I laughed- meaning you did good.
But alas- now for the Zay style constructive part of the criticsm- don't worry my friend- it shall be quick and painless-
I'm fucking all for fucking cussing- however I think there were some lines you could have done with out it. You do a great job of setting a quick rythym to this scene- but if you read it out loud- you'll see sometimes the cussing gets in the way more than it emphasizes- it kind of throws off the rhythm for a few seconds. But that is my only complaint. So yay! *cheers* and I'm so glad you defeated the curse of writers block for yet another day- and I wish you mas inspiration por manana.
LMFAO!!! That was some goooood shtuff. Wah haaa! *falls over laughing*
I was wondering if that would turn into a CWT reference. It was funny, but just a little to crazy. I stopped believing once you got to the knife. What 18 year old Jew even talks about stabbing people, let alone actually does it?
Um... present company excluded.
So come back to this, go somewhere a little surreal and less obvious/violent. I'd like to see what happens.
The buildup was great. And I must say I wish I still had Zay-esque comments on *my* playaday website.
I especially like the misunderstanding of "I found Jesus". I think I'll steal it.
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